Cover Letter Case
Essay by Jasper Wong • September 15, 2015 • Essay • 728 Words (3 Pages) • 1,269 Views
Cover Letter
Dear Ms. Lily,
Were halfway through the semester, I have already finished my essay #2, in this letter I am going to respond about the peer-review. First of all, I would like to thank you for reviewing my draft and assisting me in improving it. I do really appreciate that you pointed out very useful suggestions, and I do believe you gave me good constructive feedback on making corrections on my rough draft. I overlooked during my rough draft, there were some strong areas throughout my paper that you made me aware of and there were also the weak areas. For instance, you suggested I need to mind my grammar and try to write correctly. You also suggested I should have concerned the organization and sentence structure of the essay. Even though the problem of the grammar still is my biggest weakness of writing, which is still challenging for me, the good thing is, through the recent efforts, I have no more frustrated about my expression, I can express what I want to say on my essay, I have been learning a lot in order to improve my writing skill, just like what Malcolm X did.
Peer-review is a good opportunity to me to see what other students, who were in my group, learn about what kinds of things work and don't work. Last Peer-review day, I read and discussed the rough drafts with classmates, and commented on their papers, I found that the feedback that they gave me, which was totally the same. For example, the grammar of my essay still had a lot of mistakes, which sounds really awkward. Besides, some of the points did not match the main idea or thesis statement. Then my group-mates used their maker to mark some incorrect parts on my essay. Now, even though I know grammar issues have been the biggest problem of mine, I know what exactly needs to be fixed up next, however, according to the advise my fellow and you gave me,it seems necessary to buy some grammar workbook to do, to improve my writing skill. What I am going to do this is to make my paper more coherence and unity in the future.
The part of the final draft of my paper which I like the most is when I write about the resource that the authors used the most is book, which helped them become talented readers. As we all know, books help us to develop basic language skills and profoundly expand our vocabularies,books provide the opportunity to share cultural experiences, which help us to understand ourselves, etc. As Malcolm X said, "Books are like the miniature encyclopedia. Anyone who has a great deal can imagine the new world that opened." This is the part of this paper which i feel confident. The part of this paper I feel uncertain is what I am talking the motivation part because my fellow said they still have a hard time figuring out what this paragraph is about. Obviously, there are indicating grammatical issues.
In conclusion,by reviewing the suggestion you and my group-mates pointed out on my rough draft, I have been trying to correct more grammar problem because I know I made a lot of mistakes on my essay. I am thankful for the suggestion you made, I do believe they have been very useful. Because I will always try! I will make improvement on my next paper. I will make a better paper that has coherence and unity as well as better evidence next time. Hope you enjoy reading my essay and cover letter!
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